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Editing error breakdown
Essay 3
 

Same comma problem as last essay (joining two complete sentences)

1) Our intentions are clear and precise and we will not allow the media or society to treat us in this manner.

Our intentions are clear and precise
and
we will not allow the media or society to treat us in this manner.

2) I have a great desire for knowledge myself and I feel that we should not be shielded from it

I have a great desire for knowledge myself
and
I feel that we should not be shielded from it

Similar as above but no "and": use semicolon

3) We as Americans do not know what we want, we should fight that battle with our minds

We as Americans do not know what we want
;
we should fight that battle with our minds

Other comma problem (when there is only one complete sentence)

4) Outside from the occasional first person experience all other information is naturally tainted by at least one individual’s personal beliefs.

Outside from the occasional first person experience
all other information is naturally tainted by at least one individual’s personal beliefs.

Punctuation with quote

5) “Are We Running Out of Wars”,
 

Agreement

6) The media often attempts to mold society’s thoughts and perceptions on current events and do not take into consideration who they are suppose to represent.
 

Miscellaneous word problems

7) Everyone is aware of the massive destruction and lose of life caused by atomic warfare.

8) As American citizens we are often only subjected to what is presented to us through the media.

9) Outside from the occasional first person experience all other information is naturally tainted by at least one individual’s personal beliefs.

10) It is clear that he does not agree with Michael Heymans decision

11) he does not posses enough information to interpret our responses

12) Outside from the occasional first person experience all other information is naturally tainted by at least one individual’s personal beliefs.